14%I honestly could easily see Dudley reacting like that. All of the Dursleys, are very much in character. I like Hermione's parents, it is very easy to see where Hermione gets her drive and strong sense of injustice. The only thing, I can't see Hermione with an entire box of porno mags in her room. It just doesn't seem like something she would do - I mean the monthly subscription thing. I'm not saying she would have never seen one or bought one. I imagine she would be against pornography, but just a tiny detail. Great story!
Reviews For INVICTUS
Date: 28 July 2020 - 07:44PM
Title: Summer with the Dursleys
Date: 16 February 2015 - 11:10PM
Title: ARRIVAL
Off to a good start! I haven't read this story in years and decided it needed to be read again. Cheers!
Date: 07 October 2011 - 01:33AM
Title: Epilogue: The Service
Fabulous story. I have been reading fanfiction like a person obsessed for the past two months and have read some fabulous and heartbreaking stories but this is the first time I have come to tears reading the fanfiction. Beth's sorting as a ghost was amazing and brought me to tears as did her funeral and finding out she was Snape's niece.
Date: 06 October 2011 - 09:21PM
Title: Return to Hogwarts
LOVE the reference to Doctor Who! Classic!!!!!!
Date: 04 February 2009 - 05:30AM
Title: Epilogue: The Service
That was beautiful!
Author's Response:
Thank you very much. I'll admit it was a hard chapter to write but a necessary one.
Now, if I can get things moving at this end I'll have some new stuff posting in a few weeks Outtakes first and then maybe the start of ILL MET.
Robert
Date: 03 February 2009 - 09:00PM
Title: The Thin Green Line
I love the Star Wars joke!
Date: 26 April 2008 - 06:09PM
Title: Return to Hogwarts
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh bugger :S
Date: 25 April 2008 - 07:21PM
Title: Catching hell on all sides
"With all do respect" shoudl be "all DUE respect" :)
Date: 25 April 2008 - 06:50PM
Title: Surprise Party!
"Then, Dumbledore turned to his deputy headmistress and said, with a twinkle in his eye, "You do realize, Minerva, that it would be most unfortunate should they be caught outside of Gryffindor Tower, in violation of curfew?"
McGonagall shot a sly glance at the Headmaster and replied, "Yes, it would at that, which is why I propose to get a late night snack from the kitchens before beginning my rounds. Would you care to join me, Albus?"
Dumbledore chuckled as he offered his arm to McGonagall.
"I believe I shall, my dear. Of course, you are aware of the recent article in the Quibbler which noted that one should not undertake strenuous exercise for at least an hour after eating?""
Bwaaaaaaaaaaaahahahahahahahahahahaha *rofl*
Date: 25 April 2008 - 06:28PM
Title: Starting the New Year
again, make sure you include "u" in "colour" and things like "realized" and "recognized" should have "s" instead of "z" :)
Date: 25 April 2008 - 05:11PM
Title: Puller's Place
"multicolored" shoudl be "multicoloured" (with a 'u'!)
Otherwise, this was an awesome chapter. A bit of light heartedness thrown in :) Love it.
Date: 25 April 2008 - 04:58PM
Title: Freedom!
" the last example of the Flower of Life is sitting out in rather plain site"
"site" shoudl be "sight" :)
Date: 25 April 2008 - 04:30PM
Title: Salvation!
rofl @ ""I know I put that picture of your cousin someplace.""
Also, in Bill's note, he asks for Vernon to "insure" Harry is ready. The word should be "ensure". "Insure" has to do with insurance!
Anyway, as for my final reaction to the actual story: BOOYAH!! GO BILL!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 25 April 2008 - 03:54PM
Title: Happy Birthday, Harry!
" Between them, I might eventually learn to pass for a Brit with my writing."
Lol, I'm sorry, but I have to admit there were a few times I thought to myself "this is an american writing this, isn't it?" But i didn't pay attention, so from now on, if I find something I find idiosyncratically American, I'll let you know! (I'm Australian- our English is much closer to British English than American English is :)).
Oh, for starters- "realized" should be "realised" (with an s, not a z).
Date: 01 September 2007 - 11:08PM
Title: The Other Guest
Author's Response:
um i just want to le u know that the link to the other story this one: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/HPYOR_archive/
Dosent work any more
Author's Response:
thanks, I had forgotten about that. here's a good link to FP's work
http://fp.fanficauthors.net/Harry_Potter.php
Robert
Date: 20 July 2007 - 08:13AM
Title: Epilogue: The Service
Author's Response:
I have never read such a great story before, one that really choked me up on the inside. I dear say, this is one of the best pieces of work I have ever read, well done!
Author's Response:
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. One of the ways I know my writing is hitting on all cyclinders is when I get choked up as I write it and that it will continue to affect me each time I reread it.
Stick around, if all goes well, I should have several outtakes for the whole Carpe Diem Univ to post inthe next two months.
Robert
Date: 15 July 2007 - 12:16AM
Title: Crossing the Rubicon
I really liked chapter 17, especially the ending of it because it would be so embarrassing to be caught with your shirt undone by a teacher.
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it *grin* Interested in your opinion of the little chat Harry has next chapter.
Robert
Date: 12 March 2007 - 11:04PM
Title: Old Friends and New Faces
Author's Response:
Ummm...I think you might have made a slight mistake actually. You say in Snape's speech about Voldemort that he was defeated 16 years ago. However it should be 15, since this is Harry's 6th yr (16 years old) and he was already one when Voldemort attacked.
Other than that your writing is superb and I can't wait to continue!
Author's Response:
Ooops. Missed that one. Snape's speach is in part adapted from another writer's scene as it worked so well for my needs, I asked her for permission to do so and she granted it. Any mistakes, however, are mine. Glad you'r enjoying it.
Robert
Date: 02 October 2006 - 08:59PM
Title: ARRIVAL
Hello there,
First off - luved it!!!!
Admittedly i was a little apprehensive with the intro of THE USMC and Sgt Major Clarke into the story but you won me over on that when Ginny said "Besides, they are in Gryffindor colors!". I didn't even see that coming. And my father retired from the Corps - still flys their flag outside. (Hangs head in shame for not seeing it sooner.)
Sorry, but somehow my fonts changed - unable to switch back.
Also luved harry's "teen witch subscription problem" - hilarious - also luv the sock craze started by Imogen.
Are we going to see more of Clarke? I ask because I was thinking of, with permissions of course, of using him in a story - but I'll try to email you directly to give you my idea so you can see if it would be ok.
Anyway - great story! - but the the whole carpe diem, A&O, etc. line has been. I'm going to star reading Hope's story now
Thanks for the ride!
John
Date: 13 June 2006 - 04:14AM
Title: ARRIVAL
great story! i loved it!
